Involving sentences

Normal:

When we arrived at the villa it was baking hot. The first thing that Dad did was to take a shower. He said that he needed to cool off after such a long journey. There was a swimming pool so we spent a lot of time mucking about in the water or splashing water over Dad!  

Involved:

When we approached at the villa it was baking hot like a chicken jumped in the oven. The first thing that Dad did was take a ice snowy shower. He said that he needed to cool off after such a long tiring journey. There was a swimming pool so we spent a lot of time mucking about in the water or splashing water over Dad!  

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